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To the THEACHER from cristina: all my annotations are in purple. the red words are carola´s text that I marked.
Title: The golden ratio in humans.
Introduction
("What is golden ratio" is a question tha must be answer in the introduction)
The study of this number called phi or "The golden ratio" in humans began in the XVI century. Leonardo Da Vinci was one of who studied about the human body and he saw that the perfection of human body corresponded with the golden ratio; Da Vinci made his conclusions about the perfection of the human body in a very famous drawing called Vitruvius, the body of a man inscribed in a circle in which details that their (I would omit it, it is confused. I would say :the body of a man inscribed in a circle in whichproportions are golden.) proportions should be golden(I would omit "should" because the proportions are measures, numbers, it couldn´t be missed. Did Da Vinci measure this proportions in a real human?).
Explication of my theme
It seems as if nature were based from( on) the golden ratio,because humans, plants and animals (give some examples) often follow patterns that correspond to modes of growth with this golden number.One of the most striking is the relative proportion to the (human)navel:if you divide the total height of a person between the distances from the navel to the feet you get the number of gold that is 1.618…, like if you divide (perhaps you can say "like that as when divide) the distance from the navel to the feet between the navel to the head also gets the number of gold or Phi. (you can say more examples and annex some pictures)
Arguments of others
Da Vinci recorded his conclusions on the proportions of men with respect to the golden ratio( it is confused) in one of the most famous pictures in history, the Vitruvius, the body of a man inscribed in a circle in which details that the proportions should be golden. (It will be better if you annex the Vitrivius).
The architect of the XX century, Le Corbusier, made studies on the human body which also used the golden ratio as the basis of his system: he observed various figures of the man; the number that is in each rectangle shows the height which must be each part of the body according to position (you must annex a picture). Many of the ratios of these numbers are very approximate the golden number: 70/43, 113/70, 140/86, 183/113, 226/140...
Currently, advanced scientific studies have shown that the thing that they sensed was true. (You must say who make these studies)
Arguments made by me
I think that many of the human body proportions and nature can be governed by numbers; I think that nature can somehow be perfect and should be governed according to some proportion.In the case of the human body proportion regarding to the number of gold, I agree with the investigations of Da Vinci and Le Corbusier, because I think that all normal human body have enough proportions that approximate the golden ratio in all parts of the body, I made experiments in my body and in the body of people close to me to check the certainty of the golden ratio with respect to the human body and I saw that it is true.(You should annex the results of your experiments and give a date of reference)
Conclusions
I conclude that most of the proportions of the human body are governed by the golden number, so I (write "we", you mustn´t personify the conclutions) can say that all normal human follow a general pattern in the structure of their body.
To the THEACHER from cristina: all my annotations are in purple. the red words are carola´s text that I marked.
Title: The golden ratio in humans.
Introduction
("What is golden ratio" is a question tha must be answer in the introduction)
The study of this number called phi or "The golden ratio" in humans began in the XVI century. Leonardo Da Vinci was one of who studied about the human body and he saw that the perfection of human body corresponded with the golden ratio; Da Vinci made his conclusions about the perfection of the human body in a very famous drawing called Vitruvius, the body of a man inscribed in a circle in which details that their (I would omit it, it is confused. I would say : the body of a man inscribed in a circle in which proportions are golden.) proportions should be golden (I would omit "should" because the proportions are measures, numbers, it couldn´t be missed. Did Da Vinci measure this proportions in a real human?).
Explication of my theme
It seems as if nature were based from( on) the golden ratio, because humans, plants and animals (give some examples) often follow patterns that correspond to modes of growth with this golden number. One of the most striking is the relative proportion to the (human) navel: if you divide the total height of a person between the distances from the navel to the feet you get the number of gold that is 1.618…, like if you divide (perhaps you can say "like that as when divide) the distance from the navel to the feet between the navel to the head also gets the number of gold or Phi. (you can say more examples and annex some pictures)
Arguments of others
Da Vinci recorded his conclusions on the proportions of men with respect to the golden ratio ( it is confused) in one of the most famous pictures in history, the Vitruvius, the body of a man inscribed in a circle in which details that the proportions should be golden. (It will be better if you annex the Vitrivius).
The architect of the XX century, Le Corbusier, made studies on the human body which also used the golden ratio as the basis of his system: he observed various figures of the man; the number that is in each rectangle shows the height which must be each part of the body according to position (you must annex a picture). Many of the ratios of these numbers are very approximate the golden number: 70/43, 113/70, 140/86, 183/113, 226/140...
Currently, advanced scientific studies have shown that the thing that they sensed was true. (You must say who make these studies)
Arguments made by me
I think that many of the human body proportions and nature can be governed by numbers; I think that nature can somehow be perfect and should be governed according to some proportion. In the case of the human body proportion regarding to the number of gold, I agree with the investigations of Da Vinci and Le Corbusier, because I think that all normal human body have enough proportions that approximate the golden ratio in all parts of the body, I made experiments in my body and in the body of people close to me to check the certainty of the golden ratio with respect to the human body and I saw that it is true. (You should annex the results of your experiments and give a date of reference)
Conclusions
I conclude that most of the proportions of the human body are governed by the golden number, so I (write "we", you mustn´t personify the conclutions) can say that all normal human follow a general pattern in the structure of their body.
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